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So, I've been drawing this comics for about a year now...

Started by themagwhatev, March 14, 2011, 02:34:53 AM

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themagwhatev

...and I would like to get some more thoughts on it.

http://themagnificentwhatever.com/

I know the site layout is a horrible mess, but that's what I get for using preset blog themes. I'm working on it.

I really just want to know if you guy like the humor, art, writing, etc. Totally open to all criticism.

Gar

Had a look at some of your stuff, those are funny. I love Don't Murder Me the dog and the Dreamwatcher.

It's kind of hard to critique non-sequitor strips seeing as each one stands on its own. Overall I found your stuff funny. Some of your strips are a bit too wordy, but not to the point where they were too hard to read. Try typing out your lines and seeing if you can trim them down before you do the lettering (which looks good, by the way, though some of your balloons are a bit too tight to the text). Sometimes you need to be verbose to serve the gag, but a lot of the time you can edit a sentence to as little as possible and it'll actually serve the gag better.

Also I don't know if having all the guys look the same is necessarily a good idea. I get that there's an 'everyman' quality, and the design itself is fine and you do good expressive faces, but if you've got several characters speaking in one strip you'd be better off differentiating them somehow. It doesn't have to be anything major: XKCD gives different stick figures hats or hair, Cyanide and Happiness prominently features blue guy and green guy. I didn't get lost between speakers at any point, but I'd like to see a bit more variation, especially when a character is given a name. For the most part you're fine continuing with Everyman A and Everyman B as long as you can continue coming up with strips that don't need specific protagonists, but maybe give B a hat or more pronounced eyebrows or something.

BaseDeath

Your stuff is funny, I like the Thought bomb and the one about the Evil Cat.

I also like the simplistic style you use. So the people looking the same doesn't bother me to much..